This week's story is called White Sheets. [7012 words]
I wrote this one sometime in 2005. I had moved to Bath but, unfortunately my shitty windows 95 PC had broken and I only had my novel on disk so I couldn't carry on with it... I had a typewriter so I figured to keep things moving I'd try to write something on it, and this is what I got! Writing on a typewriter is VERY difficult- no editing (unless you want to re-write the whole page (which happened several times...))! And I personally don't really rate the story, I think its a bit simple.
I originally called it 'Greedy Fly' which, if you're not familiar with late nineties post-grunge is the title to a Bush song (Bush were my favourite band when I was a teenager) and I had the title in a big list of story titles I often refer to. I had a vague idea of grungy hospitals (from the music video) so the story came out of that.
One other thing I'd like to say about this one- I forgot all about it, completely! when I was going through all my work in January I found it and read it and honestly forgot the twist, which was good! It meant I could see it like an outsider and see what was good and bad about it. I changed it accordingly and this is the best I think it could be. I also changed the title to be more appropriate to the story so here it is.
Anyway, feedback please as always!
B A Jones 07/04/2014
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